The table bellow gives informationon consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002

The table bellow gives informationon consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The table bellow gives informationon consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002
The table illustrates
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percentage
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the persentage
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persentage
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percentage
of national
consumer
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expenditure by category in
Ireland
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, Italy,
Spain
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,
Sweden
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,
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Turkey
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and Turkey
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in 2002 Generally speaking, food, drinks,
tobacco
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and tobacco
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showed the highest
percentage
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of customer spending in all
country
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countries
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.
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,
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leisure and education demonstrated the lowest
percentage
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in the table. At
the
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first,
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consumer
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spending on food,drinks and tobacco in
Turkey
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showed the highest
percentage
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(32.14%),followed by
Ireland
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at 28.91%,
then
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Spain
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was 18.80%, at the
last
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Italy and
Sweden
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had
similar
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a similar
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percentage
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(16.36%; 15.77%).
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However
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However,
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buyer spending on clothing and footwear
showed
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was
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lower than
food
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on food
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,drinks and tobacco.
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Moreover
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consumer
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spending on clothing and footwear in Italy showed the highest
percentage
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by
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of
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9.00%,
while
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Sweden
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showed the lowest
percentage
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by
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of
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5.40%.
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Turkey
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Spain
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Ireland
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demonstrated similar levels
by
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of
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6.63%, 6.51%,
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and 6.43
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%. It can be seen that
leisure
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the leisure
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and education categories showed the lowest level than others.
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Moreover
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consumer
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spending on leisure and education in
Turkey
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demonstrated the greatest level (4.35%),
on the other
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hand
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the smallest
percentage
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showed
Spain
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by
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apply
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1.98%. But other countries(
Sweden
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,Italy,
Ireland
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) presented enough level by 3.22%, 3.20%, 2.21%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
Vocabulary: Replace the words consumer, ireland, spain, sweden, turkey, percentage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 7 times.
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