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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statem

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It is a common viewpoint that in the future
people
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 will be solely
depend
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 on
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e-papers rather than buying
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physical
 newspapers or books. I partially agree with
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 notion, as
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 trend is expanding
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 the advancements in technologies,
however
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, there are
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 some misconceptions about
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 new shift.
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 matter with a logical narration. On the one hand, it is very true that a significant amount of
people
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 are shifting to online reading resources because of flexibility and convenience. Faster access to news around the world and brand-new books make
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e-reading more popular.
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,
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digital reading is
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 much easier, thanks to modern mobile electronic devices with screens, like
mobilephones
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mobile phones
 and tabs.
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,
people
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 can read
news
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while
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 they commute to their workplace even
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public transportation through
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e-newspaper
 services like
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 The Time newspaper
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 their smartphones.
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 development is rising because of
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convenience and flexibility of
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digital reading platforms.
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, even though the fact that
e-readers
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e-reader
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 numbers are rising, the argument that these tools are cost-free is contradictory. The apps and websites that provide books and news began to charge
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consumer fees on
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 basis
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 the
last
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, one of the popular e-book platforms, Kindle charge the readers
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 sum at frequent time
intervels
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intervals
, eventually
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 the buyers to
purcahse
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purchase
 more than necessary.
Consequently
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, the lack of financial advantage from
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 reading approach can deviate many
people
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 from
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 trend. In conclusion, in the modern world, the consumer behaviour of society is
constently
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constantly
 changing and it
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readering
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reading
rendering
 habits of individuals. To a certain extent, I agree that in the future e-reading might be dominant, yet, the surge of
subscripition
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subscription
subscriptions
 charges in digital reading networks challenges the validity of
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 argument.

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Task Achievement
The introduction could be improved by clearly outlining your main points and arguments that will be discussed in the essay. This would help set the stage for your reader.
Task Achievement
Try to ensure that all your ideas are clearly developed and supported with specific examples. Some points were less detailed, which made them less persuasive.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that your ideas flow logically from one to the next. Transitional phrases could enhance coherence, especially in the second paragraph.
Coherence and Cohesion
Check for minor grammatical errors and typos, such as 'physicial', 'mobilephones', and 'readerings', as these can distract from your message.
Task Achievement
Your essay presents a balanced view by acknowledging both sides of the argument, which is a positive aspect.
Task Achievement
You have successfully identified relevant examples to support your points, such as the mention of Kindle and e-newspaper services.
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