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Today, many people do not know their neighbors. Why is this? What can be done about this?

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In the past, neighbors had strong
relationship
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 and interacted regularly.
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, in
todays
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today's
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 modern
socity
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society
, many
people
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 don’t even know who lives next door.
This
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 issue
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due to
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 several reasons, but there are
also
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 effective solutions that can help to strengthen
neighborly
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neighbourly
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 connections. One of the main reasons for
this
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 phenomenon is instability. To be more clear, some
people
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 move a
lot
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 from their home to another home because
some
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of some
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 conditions, whether it’s because
the
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of the
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 job, family, or
what so ever
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whatever
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, that make
this
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people
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person
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 think that contact with his temporary
neighbor
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neighbour
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 is futile. Another reason is the existence of social
media
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,
people
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nowdays
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 spend a
lot
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 of
time
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 on social
media
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 which
make
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makes
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 them
don’t
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not
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 need to contact
with
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apply
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people
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 in real life and
make
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makes
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 them isolated. To address
this
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issues
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,
people
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 who move a
lot
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 have to settle
,
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 and
chose
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 a job that
don’t
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 make them need to move a
lot
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,
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 and live near to their family.
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people
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 who spend a
lot
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 of
time
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 on social
media
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 have to
mange
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manage
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 their
time
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, and contact with
another
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people
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 in their real
life
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lives
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. and make
partys
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parties
 and events with their
neighbors
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neighbours
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 so they can live in harmony with a strong relationship. In conclusion, modern lifestyle, technology and social
media
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 have contributed to the lack of interaction between
neighbors
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neighbours
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.
However
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, by
organize
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 community activities,
manging
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managing
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time
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,
createing
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creating
 shared spaces, and
settle
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settling
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 personal
life
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lives
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,
people
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 can build
a strong relationships
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strong relationships
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 with those living around them.

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language
Make sure to proofread your essay for small grammatical errors and typos. For example, 'todays' should be 'today's' and 'socity' should be 'society'.
content
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coherence
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content
Your introduction clearly sets the context of the issue, and the conclusion summarizes the main points well.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • community engagement
  • social isolation
  • neighborhood watch
  • local initiatives
  • virtual interaction
  • privacy concerns
  • resident mobility
  • technological advancements
  • social media influence
  • work-life balance
  • busy personal schedules
  • community events
  • local residents
  • social interaction
  • community ties
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