Advertising is becoming more and more common in everyday life. Is it a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays,
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advertisments
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advertisements
and campaigns are becoming more popular and seeing them everywhere in our day-to-day lives.
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essay will discuss both the positive and negative developments of
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presents
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my opinion. On the one hand,
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Advertisements
are common
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these days
in
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Televisions, radios and bill
boardings
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, which
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the
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people's
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need
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not
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everywhere for the
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they want to buy.
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,
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is helping
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us to know which product is safe and unsafe and
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in knowing
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to know
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the unfamiliar items with
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better uses.
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, in New York City,
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Square showcases all the
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that's
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happening all over the world, which helps
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people
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to know about different things and keep them updated all the time.
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, some
people
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contend that
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advertisments
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advertisements
advertisement
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negative
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effects
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on
people
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's wealth because of their fake publicity making them fooled by their fake
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. Most advertising industries
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these days
are bringing
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low quality
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products
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and promoting
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on
televisions
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television
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and making
people
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to
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buy those
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but
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they are fake.
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,
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is
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considered an enormous problem. In Manchester,
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, a survey conducted in 2021 on detergent
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revealed that
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most
people
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are not satisfied with the product, which made them buy after seeing the television
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advertisments
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advertisements
. In conclusion,
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has
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benefits if they showcase
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quality
products
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and real information.
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, it
effects
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on
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the
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people
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's money by purchasing those
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products
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and
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also
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considered
as
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a major drawback. So, it's better to follow the real content and
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advertisements
.

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grammar
Check for spelling mistakes in your essay, such as 'advertisments' (should be 'advertisements') and 'thesedays' (should be 'these days'). Prioritize proofreading for grammatical accuracy and vocab usage.
coherence
Consider enhancing your topic sentences to clearly state the main idea of each paragraph. This will help improve the logical flow between your ideas.
task achievement
Try to avoid phrases like 'most people' without specifying a clear subject for better clarity. Providing exact data or detailed examples can strengthen your arguments and make them more persuasive.
structure
The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. It's good to see that you have stated your opinion in the introduction.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • promote
  • economic growth
  • provide information
  • awareness
  • job opportunities
  • manipulative
  • misleading
  • consumerism
  • materialism
  • invade
  • personal space
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