The graph below gives information about the percentage of population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with prediction for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with prediction for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below gives information about the percentage of population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with prediction for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph demonstrates how have
chanded
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the percentage of people living in
cities
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compared to
total
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the total
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population
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since 1970 and predicts
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the main
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points in the nearest future.
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significant urbanization involves all given
cities
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.
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the number of city ​​residents will apparently continue increasing, in
Indodesia
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Indonesia
and
Philippines
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the Philippines
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it is expected that the urban migration will stabilise by 2040. In detail,
Philippines
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the Philippines
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and Malaysia were the most
urbanizated
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urbanised
countries in 1970 having around 30% of
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population
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the population
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living in
sities
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cities
.
Athough
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both of them had a noticeable
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growth up to above 50% in 1990, afterwards, in
Philippines
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the Philippines
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people started to leave
cities
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and
situation
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has
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changed only by 2010 when
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population
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the population
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became
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to grow again.
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the same
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the urbanization of Malaysia has dramatically risen and it is expected that the rise will get slower after 2020. Thailand had
an
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industrial growth until 1990 and
then
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the percentage of city ​​residents became stable
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at
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the 30% mark. It is predicted that
urban
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the urban
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population
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will increase after 2020.
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, Indonesia was the least urbanized country having only around 13% of
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population
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the population
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living in
cities
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in 1970. But by 2020 Indonesia has
became
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the second most urbanized country.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cities, population with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • percentage
  • population
  • predictions
  • significant increase
  • dramatic rise
  • urban population
  • industrial growth
  • economic development
  • steady growth
  • urban migration
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