Many young people today leave school with a negative attitude towards learning. What is the reason, and what can be done to encourage a positive attitude to learning.

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Many students leave school with a negative attitude towards the education system, there are many reasons for that.
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essay will discuss some of those reasons and what could be done to prevent it. First of all, one of the main causes for learners to gain dislike towards learning is the school environment. The school itself and the teaching staff are huge
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, if the teachers are
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the students to start liking the subject more, and that
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positive attitude towards learning. In conclusion, there are many problems in the systems that
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to be changed so learners can start
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The essay successfully identifies a relevant issue and attempts to address it, demonstrating an understanding of the task.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • negative attitude
  • learning environment
  • academic pressure
  • disinterest
  • curriculum
  • engagement
  • innovative teaching methods
  • project-based learning
  • digital literacy
  • mental health issues
  • support programs
  • real-world applications
  • long-term learning
  • student voice
  • holistic approach
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