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The bar chartbelow shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014

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The bar chart illustrates the
highest
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 ten nations for the
production
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 and utilisation of electrical energy in 2014. By and large,
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 China and the United States were the top
countries
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 in the generation of
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electrical power.
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, Germany and Korea Republic
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 were the least nations in the same field.
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, in all
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countries
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countries,
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 the
production
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, relatively,
exceed
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 the consumption, except Germany. In terms of China and the United States, the generations for
both
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countries
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 were 5.398 and 4.099
billions
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 kWh,
whereas
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, the consumed power
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 5.322 and 3.866, respectively.
While
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 in Russia, the
production
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 and utilisation were
both
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 just above 1000
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 kWh.
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, in Japan, India, Canada, France and Brazil, in all of the mentioned
countries
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both
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of
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the generation and the consumption were relatively less than 1000.
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, the
least
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last
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 data were seen in Germany and
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the Korea
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Korea
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Korean
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 Republic
were
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where
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both
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of
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the utilisation and the
production
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 registered around only 500
billions
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billion
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 kWh.

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language
Ensure to use a wider range of vocabulary to avoid repetition and to express your ideas more clearly.
content
Try to provide a clearer distinction between production and consumption figures in your analysis, perhaps using comparative phrases or specific examples.
structure
The essay provides a clear overview of the data presented in the bar chart.
content
You've accurately noted the general trends in electricity production and consumption.

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