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The plan below show the layout of a unit sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment

The plans illustrate the supposed development in the design of a university's
sports
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centre
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. And compare it with the current layout.
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, obviously, the design of the
sports
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centre
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 will be expanded dramatically, by adding a number of entertainment amenities. In terms of the current layout, by entering through the reception, there is a
25 meters
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25-meter
 pool, that
surrounded
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is surrounded
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 by a gym from from the north and a seating area from the east,
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 a changing room from the west. Outside, there are two outdoor courts
in
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on
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 each side of the current
sports
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centre
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.
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, the developmental plan depicts essential changes.
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 to say, the outdoor courts at the west will be replaced by a leisure pool.
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While the
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 other one
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that
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which
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 is located
at
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on
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 the east side, is going to be exchanged
by
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for
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 a
sports
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 hall.
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, two dance studios will be added at the far east part of the intended renewal picture.
Finally
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, two changing rooms,
as well as
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 a cafe, and
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a sport
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sport
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 shop, all these accessories will be placed along the south part of the new
sports
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centre
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's layout.

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coherence and cohesion
Try to clearly outline the main features of both the current and proposed layouts in separate paragraphs for better clarity.
task achievement
When describing the changes, ensure you use more varied vocabulary and sentence structures to engage the reader.
task achievement
The essay successfully provides a comparative analysis between the current and proposed layouts, which is essential for the task.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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