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The table below shows information and predictions regarding the change in percentage of the population aged 65 and above in three countries

The table below shows information and predictions regarding the change in percentage of the population aged 65 and above in three countries
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The table gives data about the proportion of the
population
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 aged 65 years and over in 3 countries (Canada,
Germany
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, and the United
Kingdom
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) in 1988,
2000
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and 2000
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, and an estimated percentage for 2030.
Overall
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, the
population
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 of elderly people is predicted to rise in all three countries over the period given. The highest percentage of older people was in
Germany
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, which is forecast to continue to remain the highest for the entire period,
while
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 the lowest proportion can be seen in the United
Kingdom
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. Between 1988 and 2000, the ageing
population
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 of Canada and
Germany
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 went up by around 5% to 20.67% and 25.32%, respectively. The United
Kingdom
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,
on the other hand
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, showed relatively little change in the proportion of its
population
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 who were 65 years old and above, remaining at just under 15% in both years. By 2030, it is expected that the
population
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 of people aged 65 and above will increase by approximately 5.5% in all three countries. The percentage is predicted to reach 30.42% in
Germany
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, 26.35% in Canada, and 20.35% in the United
Kingdom
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, germany, kingdom with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage change
  • population
  • aged 65 and above
  • information
  • table
  • data
  • trends
  • patterns
  • comparison
  • predicted
  • future
  • findings
  • comment
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