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Band 4.5

Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 254 words.

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Nowadays, more and more
rubbish
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are
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is
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 produced by human beings, it is leading to a worse living condition
to
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for
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 all the
pepole
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people
 who are living are the earth. The reasons to cause
this
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 situation are
listing
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listed
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 below.
First,
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the packing of a product has been wasted
due to
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 its over-wrapping. Many
companys
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companies
 spend lots of
efforts
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effort
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 on the looking of a product to boost their
customers
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customer's
customers'
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 buying. Once I bought a cake for my friend to celebrate her birthday, I chose the one with a tiara on the top of the cake and with some other
docerations
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decorations
locations
. After that party, when we
clean
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cleaned
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 the table, we found out there
are
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were
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 so many things that we
need
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needed
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 to throw away from that fancy cake, all the beautiful but useless
decrrations
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decorations
were
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apply
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became
rubbish
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.
Second,
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the once-using products are too common in our daily
life
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lives
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. We drink bottled water and shop with plastic bags all the time. Most of the products that we can buy or use are only used for one time.
Goverments
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Governments
 actually are making efforts
on protecting
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to protect
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 our environment
for
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by
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 reducing the
rubbish
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.
Like charging
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Charging
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 money for plastic
bag
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bags
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 when you go shopping to encourage people
bring
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to bring
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 their own
bag
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bags
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 which can
reducing
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reduce
be reducing
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 plastic bag
using
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use
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. But there
are
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is
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 more they can do,
for instance
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, let the company
reducing
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reduce
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 the wrapping and packing materials
using
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used
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,
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and encouraging
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encouraging
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encourage
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 people to take recycled containers when they shop the food . I believe
this
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rubbish
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 issue will have a strong influence on our daily
living
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lives
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, so
that
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apply
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we all should be aware of reducing the
rubbish
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making
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apply
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to make our
life
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lives
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 better.

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language use
Consider revising grammatical errors and sentence structures for clarity, particularly subject-verb agreement and word choice.
coherence
Ensure clearer topic sentences for each paragraph to enhance logical flow and coherence between ideas.
task achievement
Try to provide more specific examples or statistics to reinforce your points and make them more convincing.
content
The essay presents relevant examples related to personal experience, showcasing an understanding of real-life implications of rubbish production.
structure
The structure of the essay is clear, with distinct paragraphs for separate ideas, making it easy to follow the writer's argument.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumerism
  • disposable culture
  • over-packaging
  • non-recyclable
  • public awareness
  • waste management
  • environmental impact
  • recycle
  • recycling facilities
  • waste separation
  • single-use products
  • infrastructure
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