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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Beka

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Beka
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The schemes below illustrate city
hospital
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hospitals
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 and roads access to them in 2007 and in 2010.
Overall
Linking Words
 we can notice that the hospital has
became
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become
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 bigger and more comfortable for staff and visitors. It hasn’t many changes , but we can see the progress of modernisation , about
a
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apply
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3 years. First of
all
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all,
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 I noticed the
car
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park
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 was
be
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apply
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for staff and public bother , but in 2010 it has been
became
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becoming
become
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 a Staff
car
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park
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.
Then
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 the
another
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other
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side
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 of
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car
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the car
a car
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park
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,
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apply
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became a bus station for hospital buses.
Two
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 ring roads
in
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on
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north
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the north
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side
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 and south
side
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 of
hospital
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the hospital
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 don’t be converted.
Definitely
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Definitely,
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 they connected
a
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apply
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two
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roundabout
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roundabouts
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 on the
two
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 sides of Hospital RD and
make
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made
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 the
two
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 passages to a bus station.
In
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On
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 the East
side
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 of
hospital
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a hospital
the hospital
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built
Verb problem
apply
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a new public
car
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park
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 for
a
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apply
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visitors , and all of
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this
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these
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 conversations
make
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made
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a
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the
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 hospital more modernised and comfortable for patients.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, park, side, two with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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