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The graph below shows the CO2 emissions of five regions from 2000 to 2020, and predictions up to the year 2040.Provide an overview of the information by identifying and describing the key details, and include comparisons where appropriate

The graph below shows the CO2 emissions of five regions from 2000 to 2020, and predictions up to the year 2040.Provide an overview of the information by identifying and describing the key details, and include comparisons where appropriate
The line graph
give
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gives
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 information about the CO2 emissions in five different
regions
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 in the
20 years
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20-year
 period from 2000 to 2020.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 most of the changes are stable, which means that each
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regions
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region
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 keep
their
Correct pronoun usage
its
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 CO2
tonnes
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 unchanged over time.
Additionally
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,
regions
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 1 always keep the highest rank of metric
tonnes
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while
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region
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 5
stay
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stays
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 lowest. Between 2000 and 2020,
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region
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regions
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 1, 2 and 5 all
have
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had
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a
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an
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 increase in
the
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apply
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emissions before
declined
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declining
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right after that.
Region
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 1 had over 9 tones, and
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also
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was also
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 the place that had the most significant change
campared
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compared
 to others.
In contrast
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, there was
an
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a
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 downward trend from 4 to 3
tonnes
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 before
rised up
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rising
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 to just under 5
tonnes
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 in 2015
of
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apply
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region
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 4. At the same time, in
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region
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Region
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 5, the emission gradually increased, which made it different from other
regions
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. In the next period , it is predicted that those rates will
stablizes
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stabilise
 and don’t have
much
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many
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 changes. There was a small decrease in the
tonnes
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 of CO2 in
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region
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Region
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 1 to about 7
tonnes
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, but
this
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 place will still keep its ranking as the highest performance.
However
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, other places
is
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are
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 going to have their metric emissions stable in the future.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words regions, tonnes, region with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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