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The maps below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Umar

The maps below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Umar
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The two maps illustrate information about the rural area of Stokeford from 1930 to 2010 .
Overall
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,
small
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 town was improved,
the
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and the
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 Farmlands were completely demolished and reconstructed, over the given period. In the north part of
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Stokeford was a bridge , which connected roads,
remained
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and remained
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 untouched during showed time . Below the bridge , nearby towards
centre
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the centre
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 was a Farmland , the government decided to destroy
them
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it
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 and built
a shrubs
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shrubs
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, on the opposite side of the road were
a
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bushes .
However
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,
citizens
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the citizens
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 of Stokeford added more bushes . Post office stay the same through the years .
In
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 the southwest side of the settlement was another Farmland , people
instead
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 of pasture constructed a park and around the park planted a lot of shrubs.The primary school built new buildings linking
school
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the school
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, thereby study centre more modernized . The large park that was in the big garden was destroyed,
some
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and some
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 trees were removed and became
into
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the retirement home. The pedestrian from the northeast
was
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disappeared wholly , because of the township established with
new
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a new
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 erection, which closed the way for
previous
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 garden.

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