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Band 4

Many people believe that countries should produce food for the whole population and import as little food as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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A lot of people see that
countries
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 should produce more
food
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 for the whole population and
import
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less
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as much
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food
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 as possible. I totally agree
with
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that
countries
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 should produce more
food
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 and I will
duscuss
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discuss
 that in
this
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 essay. First I think
make
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making
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food
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 in the
country
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 will help the
country
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 to make more
money
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 and buy less
for
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apply
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the
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apply
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food
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 and that will come back to
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the country
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country
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country's
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 economy and I will explain
this
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 if the
goverment
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government
give
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gives
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 more opportunities to everyone
disided
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decided
 to start a company to make
food
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 the
money
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 will give to
company
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the company
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 and the company will sell
food
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 at the same
country
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 and that will increase the economy of the
country
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 because the
money
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 will nor
laeve
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leave
 the
country
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.
Next
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 the
country
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 will save more
money
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about
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on importing
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import
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food
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 and that make the
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prices
priceies
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prices
 low because the
food
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made
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is made
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at
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in
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 the same place so they do not have
pay
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to pay
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 more to
the
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apply
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other
countries
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 to
import
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 the
food
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 because they will made in the
country
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for example
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 the fast
food
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 the place who
import
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 the
food
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 will be more
expincvie
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expensive
 than other
resturanrts
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restaurants
 who pay it from the same
country
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 maybe it will be more
lucxruy
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luxury
lucky
 to
import
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 the
food
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 but it will be worst by the time on the
country
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 if no one pay the local
food
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to conclude
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 I believe
the
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apply
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local
food
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helped
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will help
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 the economy if
every one
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everyone
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pay
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pays
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it
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for it
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 and
stop
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stops
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pay
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paying
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 the
import
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food
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 and I see in the
fuether
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future
 the big
countries
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 will stop
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import
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importing
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food
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.

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structure
Try to clearly define your position in the introduction and summarize it in the conclusion. Make sure both are structured and coherent.
coherence
Ensure that your paragraphs are logically connected and each has a clear main idea. Use linking words to improve flow between ideas.
support
Provide specific examples to support your arguments. This strengthens your points and makes your essay more persuasive.
content
You express a clear opinion on the topic and show your agreement with the statement.
content
You attempt to discuss both economic and practical aspects of food production, which is relevant to the topic.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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