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The table below show the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

The table below show the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
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The table displays the
number
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 of
people
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 who visited Ashdown
Museum
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 before and after
refurbishment
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. The pie chart illustrates the
survey
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 details about how
people
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 respond to the
refurbishment
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museum
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 and the after-renewal.
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, the table shows that the
number
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 of
visitors
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 increased significantly after
refurbishment
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.
Moreover
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, the results of the
survey
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 presented
visitors
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 satisfaction has been increased sharply.
Its
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 clearly seen that before
refurbishment
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 the
number
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 of
visitors
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 was 74,000,
while
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 after renewing, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 increased by 18000
people
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 from 74,000 to 92,000. In terms of visitor satisfaction,
people
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 are satisfied with
museum
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refurbishment
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due to
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 their response. The most significant were
people
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came
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who came
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 to the
museum
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 before the
refurbishment
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 response was very satisfied had increased from 15% to 35%, and
people
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 with satisfied had increased by 10% from 30% to 40%.
On the other hand
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, compared with after
refurbishment
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, dissatisfied
visitors
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 had dropped sharply from 40% to 15%.
According to
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 the
survey
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,
people
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responded
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who responded
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 with very dissatisfied or no change saw
a
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apply
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little or no change throughout the
survey
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, museum, refurbishment, survey, visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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