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The chart below shows the sleep patterns of people in five different occupations according to a Canadian study. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the sleep patterns of people in five different occupations according to a Canadian study. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
chart
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 shows the sleep
time
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 of people in five different occupations
according to
Linking Words
 a Canadian study.
According to
Linking Words
 the
chart
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 we see that students and
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
full
Add a hyphen
full-time
show examples
time
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 mothers
take
Verb problem
spend
show examples
 the most
time
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 sleep and the
chart
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 but on the other side
doctor
Fix the agreement mistake
doctors
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is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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 the lower
one
Correct pronoun usage
ones
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.
First
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First,
show examples
 we can see in the
chart
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 that
student
Fix the agreement mistake
students
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 and
mothers
Correct pronoun usage
their mothers
show examples
 take the most
time
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 sleeping in the
chart
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,
student
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a student
show examples
 from 11pm to 7am a
full
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full-time
show examples
time
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 sleep it is the same
time
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to
Change preposition
as
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 the mother but we can
foucs
Correct your spelling
focus
 and see the difference that
mother
Correct article usage
the mother
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asleep
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is asleep
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 not a full
time
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 because she is sleep 3 times a day.
And after
Correct word choice
After
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 that
come
Wrong verb form
came
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 the truck driver and the business Executive
by
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for
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 around 6 hours but
driver
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the driver
show examples
is
Wrong verb form
was
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 not
a
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
full
time
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and
Correct word choice
apply
show examples
after that came the doctor
by
Change preposition
at
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 the lowest
time
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 sleeping in the list by 5 hours a day and he woke up
a
Correct article usage
apply
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one
hours
Change to a singular noun
hour
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 and back
sleep
Fix the infinitive
to sleep
show examples
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to".
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 5 times.
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