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Some people believe that professional like doctors and engineers , should be required to work in the country where they training .Other believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish . discuss both side and give your opinion

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The professional class is an important part of each
country
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 to contribute in building and shaping a community in a well-direction .Training medical doctors or engineers has burned a huge amount of time and resources to build them into effective individuals ,so , Training abroad for professionals must be done based on specific rules and protocols that their immigration will bring adequate achievement for their home
country
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 and not an abuse method of the destination as well . Training at higher academic levels will occupy opportunities for the local residents who need more special equipment and professors to teach them ,
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 , building a professional lab has spent more resources to hire top-level scientists and post-graduate students to do experiments and study in specific fields,so, the results and output of each department must be sensible for the destination
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 , even more, they will hurt in
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 way, because academic department have guidelines for specific expectations and needs in their society , so ,hiring a PhD student for 5 years to complete a national project would a sensible target. Individuals who want to travel as a matter of training and reach outstanding educational goals must design based on their plans and motivation not based on having a more high
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 no practical benefits ,so , it is inevitable without clear purpose and design, travelling of these groups will create more tension in their personal life and put heavy weight on their origin
country
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. Medical doctors and engineers are a worker class of society and give the average level of services, and sometimes these roles do not need an advanced lab or high-tech hospital or special machines for engineers to build a routine house or design a streer or a bridge,
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 , professionalists have more ambitious and passion to dedicate their life to achieve higher skills to apply in their job . I think if the origin and destination
country
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 have a common project to collaborate
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 type of immigration is more favourable for both sides,
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, professionals could immigrate for the rest of their lives to another part of the world if they are given their own loan as national duties to the home
country
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task achievement
Strengthen the introduction by clearly outlining both sides of the argument and your opinion in a structured format. This will help set the stage for your essay.
coherence
Improve coherence by using clearer linking words and phrases to connect your ideas and paragraphs. This can enhance the flow of your argument.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples to support your points. For instance, mention specific professions or case studies about professionals working abroad and their impacts.
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You have presented a thoughtful perspective on the topic, analyzing the impact of professionals working abroad.
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Your essay shows ambition in tackling a complex topic, indicating an engaging and analytical mindset.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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