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Some people say that it is better to work for a large company than a small one. Do you agree or disagree?

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there has been an ongoing debate about whether it is beneficial to work in
organization
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an organization
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 or in a small well it
is
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totally
depend
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 on personal choice or comfort. Other individual wants to work for a large band or a small one from
white
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a white
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 point of view
the
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working in a large company can be more beneficial because it's provided career development job security and some other personal benefits. One of the key
advantage
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advantages
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 of working with
large
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a large
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 organization is
the
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apply
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career development
for example
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 people who work in big
companies
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 have more opportunities as they
divided
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are divided
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 into different
sector
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sectors
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 and have various
role
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roles
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 to perform in the company so by working for some period of time they can attain higher position. These
companies
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also
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 provide job security as they have different resources.
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, large management.
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Also
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 give some
benefit
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benefits
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for example
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,
healthbenefits
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health benefits
, retirement,
training
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and training
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program
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programs
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 that help implies for
develop
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 skills and knowledge.
In addition
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 to
this
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 implies who are working with large
companies
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received
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 a good amount of income
as a result
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 mental satisfaction is created among them and
also
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 social reputation is increased.
Does
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 those
companies
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 create a happy environment all around
.
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however
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,
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while
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apply
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working in
a
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apply
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small
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companies
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company
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have
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has
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their
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its
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 own benefit as they can get flexible hours,
according to
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 their own choice,
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furthermore
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furthermore,
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 they can have good
relation
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relations
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 with
co-employees
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coworkers
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 but from my point of view working in
a
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apply
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large
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companies
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company
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have
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has
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 more
benefit
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benefits
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as
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apply
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compared to
the
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a
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 small as I discussed above . In
conclusion
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while
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 small
companies
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 provide flexibility and
friendly
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a friendly
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 environment,
but
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apply
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I think that these things are not enough to enjoy the life in individuals who are seeking
for
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long-term
carrier
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career
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 success and stability working for a large company is the better choice.

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grammar
Make sure to use correct grammar and sentence structure to enhance clarity. For example, 'it is totally depend on personal choice or comfort' should be 'it totally depends on personal choice or comfort.'
structure
Ensure that you clearly introduce your main points in the body paragraphs. A more structured approach would improve the flow of ideas.
examples
Add more specific examples to support your points. While you mention benefits, concrete examples (like specific training programs) would strengthen your argument.
content
Your essay covers both sides of the argument, which shows awareness of different perspectives.
structure
You have a clear conclusion that summarizes your opinion, which is important for wrapping up the essay effectively.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • corporate culture
  • hierarchy
  • marketability
  • professional development
  • entrepreneurial
  • autonomy
  • networking
  • prestigious
  • job security
  • scale of operations
  • benefits package
  • research and development
  • innovation
  • professional networking
  • career advancement
  • organizational structure
  • flatter hierarchy
  • versatile skill set
  • benefits
  • work-life balance
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