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Band 4

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interestedin finding out about the history of the house or the building they live in. What are the reason for this? How can people research this?

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History
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 is the foundation of each building as a house or as a country , because , landing in a place needs emotional connection in related identical issues to care more about the
plave
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place
 of living ,
however
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 , in
technical
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the technical
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matter
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 it could be so irrelevant ,but , it well understood in approaching time residents need more values and purposes to tackle
exsistential
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existential
tentions
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tensions
 in human life . There are many methods to explore
in
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the issue of
history
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 in
related
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 to
place
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the place
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 of living . One of them that I
exprienced
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experienced
 personally ,
aranging
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arranging
 the city design based on the events ,because , every government has a plan for developing and reserving a cultural heritage to create a bounding for residents and it is a convenient and achievable method to buldge something in minds during daily routines . Another method to explore
in
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a
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history
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 is
built
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 a combination
with
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of
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 art and performance in the stories through
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the medias
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medias
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media
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, TV Shows and by the famous
character
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characters
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 of each country , it would be possible
become
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to become
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 a role
moel
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model
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 for
young
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the young
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 generation as well ,
however
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 , scientific approached in
history
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 need more
archeological
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archaeological
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 studies through evolution theories or based on affinity to
a
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nature and it is about
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history
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the history
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 of
planet
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the planet
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 .
Behavioral
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 lessons and building strategic plans are rooted in
a
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history
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 is another format to shape
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the desire
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desire
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desires
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 of people ,because ,there are many lessons
which
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that
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 everybody
could
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can
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 learn
of
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from
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a
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apply
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history
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 ,
for example
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 , stories about
different
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a different
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revolution
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revolutions
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 across the world teach about freedom theories in human
history
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 . In conclusion ,
history
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 is a mysterious field to explore science ,
planet
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the planet
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 , human life and
turning
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a turning
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 point .

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task achievement
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task achievement
The essay demonstrates an understanding of the topic and presents some relevant ideas about how people can research the history of their buildings.
task achievement
You attempted to include examples and reasons for the importance of history, showing an effort to connect with the reader.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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