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The table below shows the numbers of visitors to the Ashdown museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The chart shows the results of a survey asking visitors how satisfied they are with their visit during the same two periods.

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to the Ashdown museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The chart shows the results of a survey asking visitors how satisfied they are with their visit during the same two periods.
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The blend of table and pie charts illustrate the number of visits made by
people
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 to the Ashdown
Museum
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 before and after its redevelopment, and the outcomes of surveys during the same years.
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, it can be clearly seen that the majority of individuals went to the
museum
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 after refurbishment,
while
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 the maximum
people
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 were satisfied with their visits and a few
people
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 showed no response. By observing the graphs, it can be noticed that before making any changes to the
museum
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, 74,000
people
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 visited, which increased by 18,000 after variations to the Ashdown
Museum
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.
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, only 15% reviewed the place as very satisfied in the initial year, which inclined to 35% after reconstruction. Approximately one-third of
people
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 were satisfied with their visits during the same two periods, but the rate of dissatisfaction decreased by 25% after variations
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 the
museum
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.
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, the proportion of
people
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 who rated the
museum
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 as very dissatisfied declined by 5% in the later years, but the ratio of no response remained
same
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the same
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, museum with synonyms.
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