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IELTS informal letter sample : Your sibling has sent you a letter asking for an update on your life. Write a letter to your sibling. In your letter: – Describe what you did for your last birthday – Ask for photos of your sibling’s last holiday – Talk about something you are looking forward to

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Hey Rick I got your letter and I am so happy to hear from you, I hope you are rocking it.
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 month was my b'day month bro. I celebrated it to the fullest. In the morning, I went for brunch with Mom and Dad, we were missing you . After that, I organised a party in Brocky's pub. My all friends were there. We danced a lot, it was a fun day for sure. Later, we went for a drive
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downtown and dined in. That's pretty much what I did. Rick, did you miss us on your holiday? By the way, tell me an interesting thing about England which you explored on your
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 visit. mama was upset because you haven't sent us the pictures from your holidays yet, send your photos as soon as you get
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 letter.
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 the holidays, I realized that It's been a
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 since we went on holiday together. I am planning to take Mom and Dad on a cruise ship to Mexico. I am booking your tickets too, Do not try to make any excuses
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 time and keep it secret from Mom and Dad that you will be there. It will be the best surprise for them. Take care of yourself and start packing your bags from now little partner. Sam

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Try to expand on some ideas a bit more to provide a fuller response. For example, you can add more details about the party or your plans for the cruise.
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Consider using more linking words or phrases to improve flow between ideas in your paragraphs.
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While your informal tone is great, be careful with abbreviated forms (like 'b'day') as they may be perceived as overly casual.
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Your letter has a friendly and warm tone, which is suitable for an informal letter.
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You provided clear descriptions of your birthday celebration, which makes your experiences engaging.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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