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Band 2.5

NOWADAYS, MORE AND MORE FOREIGN STUDENTS ARE GOING TO ENGLISH – SPEAKING COUNTRIES TO LEARN THE “ INTERNATIONAL LANGUAGE – ENGLISH”. IT IS UNDOUBTEDLY TRUE THAT STUDYING ENGLISH IN AN ENGLISH SPEAKING COUNTRY IS THE BEST WAY, BUT IT IS NOT THE ONLY WAY TO LEARN IT. DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE WITH THE ABOVE STATEMENT?

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In a globalised world, more foreign students want to move
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english-speaking
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 countries to learn the international
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 - English. Some
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 and achieve some goals,
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 other
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 think that learning
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 is possible everywhere without moving abroad. So, I absolutely agree with the statement below because the 21st century provides numerous techniques for learning online. Nowadays,
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 have a lot of ways to learn everything, especially
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. First of all, advancements in technology,
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 it is more convenient for
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 because of a variety of choices of study
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, teachers and even
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 of study.
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, there are a lot of websites that contain
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 can register and practice English with local citizens or native speakers. It is a good opportunity for
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grammar
Consider rephrasing 'move english-speaking countries' to 'move to English-speaking countries' for grammatical accuracy.
content
Clarify your main points with more specific examples or experiences to strengthen your argument.
structure
Ensure that each paragraph begins with a clear topic sentence that outlines its main idea.
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Your essay effectively presents a clear stance on the topic, showing your agreement with the statement.
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You included some relevant points about the benefits of online learning, which is a great way to support your argument.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • immersion
  • language acquisition
  • exposure
  • contextual understanding
  • technology
  • online courses
  • language learning apps
  • virtual exchanges
  • language exchange programs
  • community partnerships
  • fluency
  • pronunciation
  • cultural exchanges
  • international student programs
  • accessible
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