Some believe that money for education should mainly be spent on better computers while others believe it would be better spent on teachers. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some people believe that money invested
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education
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should
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on better
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,
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others think it is better to spend the money on developing good
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.
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we can use
computers
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to speed up research and scientific developments, replacing them fully with good
teachers
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can be both dangerous and impossible.
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essay agrees with
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statement and believes that,
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with technological developments,
computers
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and AI significantly increase the quality and accuracy of education, they cannot be replaced completely with good
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. The ever-increasing developments of AI in recent years
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leads
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to a jump in
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of growth of science and research and many
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unsolveable
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unsolvable
problems throughout history
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solved by
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.
students
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can use
computers
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to self-study some of the topics, but
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this
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self-studies are not very accurate and deep. AI and
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can answer
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question
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superficialy
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superficially
superficial
, but people should know what to ask and is the given answer by
computer
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the computer
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is correct or not.
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,
scientisct
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scientist
scientists
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Ohio
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University of Medical Sciences
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could use AI to answer so many questions in their research about regrowing parts of
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. Meanwhile, learning is a human activity and teaching humans should be interactive and responsive. Using
computers
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and AI blindly can mislead humans with little or
limite
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limited
knowledge. There should always be some human tutor who knows the topic deeply and can show the depth of knowledge to their
students
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.
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, studies show that
student
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students
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who learn from
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experienced teachers
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teachers
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tend to study in higher education than
students
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using
computers
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and AI solely. In conclusion, the government should allocate a budget to developing
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teachers
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and updating their methods of teaching. By developing and
empowring
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empowering
teachers
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with new technology and methods of teaching, they can be a proper guide and tutor for
students
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and teach them the depth of the field of study.

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Make sure that your thesis statement clearly reflects your opinion in a well-defined manner. It should also encompass the main arguments you will present throughout the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to enhance the logical flow of ideas in your paragraphs. Use linking phrases to ensure smooth transitions between your points, making it easier for the reader to follow your argumentation.
Coherence and Cohesion
Pay attention to grammar and spelling to avoid small inaccuracies that might affect the clarity of your ideas, such as incorrect word forms and typos.
Task Achievement
You present a balanced discussion of both sides of the argument, demonstrating an understanding of the topic.
Task Achievement
Your examples are relevant and illustrate your points well, which adds depth to your argument.

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