Some countries achieve international sports by building specialised facilities to train top athletes, instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think this is positive or negative development? Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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International sports
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by some nations through constructing specific
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where the most talented
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can
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, rather than making these
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accessible to everyone. I support the above statement
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because we are going to see the importance of using selective
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for top
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instead
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of making them use the normal training grounds. Sports
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require intensive
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and training which are specialised to their specific body and sport. You often see the most accomplished
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trainer or even their own training
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in their houses.
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place because these players require different training from the general public which makes them the best in their sporting activity. Making these
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available for everyone will reduce the training time
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in the training centre or even the
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being distracted by other
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. Becoming a great athlete means you follow a specific routine in the field or court, having a public centre as your training place makes it difficult to follow the routine.
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day the trainee is required to go on the treadmill but
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the gym they cannot access it, that means that the routine will be changed making it difficult for them to achieve their goals. On the other side of having specialised
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where top
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is not easy to construct and maintain, they require
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machines which are expensive to buy. They
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need personal trainers who
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cheap to employ.
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having a different place where these
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train
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will be an expensive task.
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mixing top
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with normal
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can be motivating, as future talents can see the effort needed to be the top 1% of the
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who make it in the sport. Mixing
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leads to the identification of new talents which would have been missed were it not for them training together. In
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having a specialised
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facility
for the sports
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person
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is important for them as it helps them focus and
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more, which is needed by the countries they represent as they are required to bring in more medals.

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coherence and cohesion
Consider providing clearer topic sentences for each paragraph to improve the logical flow of ideas. Ensure each paragraph connects back to the main argument of whether specialized facilities are positive or negative.
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Make sure to balance your arguments by giving an equal amount of attention to both views before stating your opinion clearly at the end.
language and accuracy
Greater attention to grammar, spelling, and punctuation can enhance readability. For example, 'personels' should be 'personnel', and 'acheived' should be 'achieved'.
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The essay presents a clear stance on the topic and outlines the importance of specialized facilities for top athletes.
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Several examples and reasons are provided to back up arguments, contributing to the overall strength of the essay.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • specialised facilities
  • train top athletes
  • international sports
  • boost
  • reputation
  • attract
  • sporting events
  • access
  • general public
  • inequality
  • opportunities
  • overemphasis
  • elite sports
  • neglect
  • grassroots development
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