Some people think that foreign Visitors should be charged more than locals when they visit cultural and tourist attractions in any country.To what extent do you agree with this view

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Nowadays, some
people
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believe that
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international
visitors
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should pay extra cost more than nations
people
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when they visit traditional
places
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and
tourist
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attractions in any country. I totally
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agree
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agrees
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agrees on
agrees to
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this
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veiw
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view
because foreign
visitors
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are able to pay extra
money
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than local
people
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and international
visitirs's
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travellers'
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money
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will become
a
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apply
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maintaince
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maintenance
support
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to
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for
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cultural and
tourist
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attraction
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attractions
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.
One
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the one hand,
tourist
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attractions have
beeen
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been
ben
incrasing
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increasing
in Global and locally.
people
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want to visit
multipual
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multiple
places
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,
some time
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sometimes
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they go to national or international
palces
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places
. when international
visitor
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visitors
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visit
to
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apply
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traditinal
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traditional
place
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places
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while
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apply
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they
should
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pay
entrence
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entrance
fees which
is
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the
high
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higher
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than national individuals and I agree
for
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with
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this
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becase
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because
they belong to
the
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developed countries that's why they are more reach than undeveloped countries.
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, It is
moral
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the moral
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responcibilty
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responsibility
of them to
spent
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spend
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extra
money
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for
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on
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the undeveloed
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undeveloed contry
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undeveloped country
which will
be help
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help
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to increase
economic
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the economic
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system of
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the undevelop
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undevelop
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undeveloped
country.
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, one survey conducted by
UN
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the UN
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they
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apply
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found
, In
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that in
India
forien
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foreign
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visitors
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visitors'
visitor's
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expenditure on historical and cultural
places
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that
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can help to boost
Indian
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the Indian
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economy
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system. On the other side, undeveloped
coutries
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countries
does
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do
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not maintain
thier
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their
ancient
palces
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places
due to
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lack of
money
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or
support
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but when international
visitiors
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visitors
pay more
money
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for
turist
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tourist
attraction
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attractions
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as a result
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this
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money
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become
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becomes
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a strong
support
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to develop or maintain
historiacl
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historical
and cultural
places
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.
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,
Tas
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the Tas
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Mahal in India,
it
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apply
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is a big ancient place
of
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in
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Indian history. Every year
thousand
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thousands
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of local and international
turist
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tourist
tourists
goes to
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go
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there.
Maintenance
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department of
Taj
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the Taj
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Mahal
do work
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works
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to provide good
facility
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facilities
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to
visitors
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like pure water, provide
hygienic
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a hygienic
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environment.
To conclude
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, some
people
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agrees
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agree
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that the
forein
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foreign
torist
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tourist
should
be
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apply
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spend more on
turist
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tourist
attractions than local
people
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. I strongly agree
to
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with
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this
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point because international
visitorst
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visitors
are very rich that's why they can afford to pay for
tourist
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attraction
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attractions
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. The use of
money
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can
support
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to
develop
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development
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ancient
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of ancient
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and cultural
places
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.

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