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The table and pie charts below show the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and pie charts below show the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table depicts the distribution of
research
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students
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 locally and internationally in Australian universities
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 the pie charts demonstrate the figures for genders of
research
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students
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 for the years 2001 and 2010.
Overall
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, it is apparent from the information supplied that the total of
research
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students
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 in Australian universities witnessed an upward trend, including domestic and international
students
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.
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, local
students
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 in
research
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 consistently outnumbered their international counterparts in both years. In detail, in 2001, the number of domestic
students
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 surpassed abroad
students
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 by nearly 6 times, with 33657 for the former and 5192 for the latter.
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, in 2010, the figure of overseas
students
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 significantly rose to 14593 which was equivalent to one-third of local
students
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. Moving on to the remaining data, local male and female
students
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 occupied a majority of 44% and 43% respectively in the total number of
students
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 in 2001, but the figures
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 displayed a considerable decline to 38% and 35% respectively in 2010. In 2001, non-local male and female
students
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 took up a tiny minority of the total, with 9% for the former and 4% for the latter. There was a significant rise in the number of non-local male and female
students
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, reaching 12% and 15% respectively.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words research, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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