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More and more people want to buy famous brands of clothes, cars and other products. What are the reasons? Do you think this is a positive or negative outcome?

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These days,
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apply
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more and more population want to spend
thier
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their
money
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 on famous
brands
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 of clothes,cars and other
products
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 they
not
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do not
did not
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 really need
it
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apply
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. In fact, people might like to show off what they have with
thier
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their
 friends and family.
This
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 essay will show
that
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is
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this is
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 absolutely a negative outcome for
this
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 habit.
Firstly
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, Spending your
money
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 on
a expensive
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an expensive brand
expensive brands
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brands
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 is wasting
money
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.
Secondly
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, it can cost you a fortune to
paid
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 back or you will on det.
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 with,
nowsaday
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nowadays
,many people
spending
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spend
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money
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 on luxury and famous
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brands
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brands'
brand's
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products
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 is absolutely
wasteing
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a waste of
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money
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.
For instance
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, many young
kid
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kids
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 have a wrong
prespective
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perspective
 about owning
a famous
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a famous brand
famous brands
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brands
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 of
products
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 is
show
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shows
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 that they are
rice
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rich
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 and cool. In fact, is better
invest
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to invest
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money
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on
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in
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 yourself in your education, investing or health,
such
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 as
attend
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attending
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a
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apply
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differents
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different
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couses
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courses
 to enhance
you
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your
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skill
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skills
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.
That is
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a termandous
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termandous
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tremendous
 way to spend your
money
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.
Moreover
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, yes, luxury
products
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such
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 as cars can
occationly
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occasionally
 bring you excellent fun with
it
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them
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.
However
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,it can cost you
few
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a few
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 years to
paid
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pay
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 off or might
be
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apply
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put you in det. For
exmaple
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example
, if you
not
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are not
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 really good
in
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at
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you
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your
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 own finances and you
over spend
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overspend
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 it or
over used
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overuse
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 your credit card, the bank will make you
paid
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pay
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 a high
percent
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percentage
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 of
intrest
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interest
 if you not
paid
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pay
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 on time. In conclusion, these days, you can find
a
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apply
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good
qualities
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quality
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products
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 as good as famous
brands
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 in many
way
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ways
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such
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as a
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a
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the
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internet
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Internet
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,
instagram
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Instagram
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 or
website
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websites
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. In fact, because the inflation our
money
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 is getting less power
that
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than
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 before. We absolutely need to apply our
money
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 on
someting
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something
 worth
to spend
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spending
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 on.

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task achievement
Consider addressing the positive aspects of brand purchasing to create a more balanced viewpoint. This will enhance the depth of your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to use transition words and phrases to improve the flow between sentences and paragraphs; this will help in creating a clearer structure.
coherence and cohesion
Pay attention to grammar and spelling, as several mistakes can distract from the message. Proofreading your essay can help in this regard.
task achievement
Your essay has a clear position, stating that you believe the trend of buying expensive brands has negative outcomes.
task achievement
You provide personal examples and insights, making your argument more relatable.
coherence and cohesion
There is a logical progression of ideas, showing an attempt to structure your essay.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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