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The The maps below show changes in the city of Nelson in recent times. maps below show changes in the city of Nelson in recent times.

The The maps below show changes in the city of Nelson in recent times. maps below show changes in the city of Nelson in recent times.
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two maps illustrate modifications in the
city
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 of Nelson in the present day. Generally speaking, the town has
been
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 a lot of development,
furthermore
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city
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the city
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 has been more modern with new buildings.
According to
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 the information on the map,
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the north
side
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 of the
city
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 has new constructions. In 2000 Nelson had the university and it has not been changed today.
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 on the left
side
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 of the university has been built
modern
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 hall of residence,
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moreover
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 a new shopping centre has been constructed from scratch in the northeastern part of the
city
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.
Old
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 train station has been removed from
east
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the east
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side
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 to
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city
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the city
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 centre,
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furthermore
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furthermore,
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 it has been modernised. A tramline has been built near the new station,to the east. The south
side
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 of the map shows new developments. The
city
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 centre was upgraded with a bike rental scheme. Left
side
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 of the map the old market has been replaced with a new shop.
Additionally
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 right
side
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 of the town there has been a new covered market.
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 highway has been changed to the street for only pedestrians. A new restaurant ,
along with
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 bars and clubs, has been established near the port.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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