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There are many types of friendship, and two of them are friendships with identical views and friendships with a range of views. This essay will discuss my opinion of the balance between these two types.

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To begin
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people
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 who believe that having friends means agreeing with their views and no one else`s might lead to negative consequences.
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, friendship builds not only from one side, all of the participants should express their views and
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. If a person surrounds themselves with
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 similar to their concept of the world, it may interfere with their moral development and self-development.
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 experiment shows that
people
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 who live in a community with conservative beliefs are struggling with the new world`s changes and find it hard
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 with
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 from other countries.
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 to individuals who make friends despite dissimilar perspectives may have both cons and pros, too.
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 is to say that
people
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 might be more flexible in communicating with
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 of various backgrounds, but
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, they could feel loneliness and even lose themselves.
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 TV show where exchange students told of their lives abroad. They had been experienced with homesickness and depression during their studies,
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 them. They explained that the reason for their feelings was the absence of the comfort zone
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they have at home. Under these circumstances,
it is clear that
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preferences
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the preferences
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 of a circle of companions with different views could not be the best idea. As far as all sides are concerned, my opinion on
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 is to create a balance between two categories of friends. Not only will your mental health be fine, but
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 your social circle will develop and improve with you.
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 of being tormented by the choices, it would be easier to get them both.
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, both types have their advantages on their own, but together they will bring more benefits and a positive experience.

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Clarify your main argument further by explicitly stating your stance in the introduction.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure smoother transitions between paragraphs to improve the overall flow of the essay.
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Support your points with clearer and more specific examples to enhance the argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your essay presents a balanced view by discussing both types of friendships.
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There are relevant examples included that relate back to the points you are making.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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