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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compariosns where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compariosns where relevant.
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The figure below depicts the amount of visitor who visited the Caribbean island from 2010 to 2017 and categorised it by their place of stay.
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, the trend of Caribbean tourism marks a significant increase throughout the 7 years.
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 trend derived from a modest growth of
foreigner
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 who stayed on the
cruise
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ships
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,
while
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tourists
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 on the island grew steadily. From 2010 to 2015,
tourists
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 who stayed on
cruise
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ships
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 have been growing steadily,
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 in 2011 the 2012 the number of
tourists
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 surged to almost 1 million people
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 before it went stagnant from 2013 to 2015. By the end of 2017, the number of
tourists
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 who stayed on the island was
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the same amount as in 2015, after experiencing a decline in 2016.
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,
cruise
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ships
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's visitors recorded a steady increase since 2012, after bouncing back from an early decline from 2011 to 2012 by 0.5 million
tourists
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.
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 has resulted in the number of visitors on
cruise
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ships
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 exceeding the total of isle visitors in 2016, and reaching the highest mark in 2017 by 2 million.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words cruise, ships, tourists with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 4 times.
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