Television sports program shows such Olympic are a good source of motivation for youths who do not like to exercise much. Do you agree or disagree include examples in your answer and provide your owns opinion.

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Health is Wealth for humans.
Excercise
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play
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crucial
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role in our daily lifestyle. It
help
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us to become fit and
health
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,
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if a
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televison
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television
shows some kind of
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sports
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that should be good for
humanbeing
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human being
human beings
.
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strongly agree with
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fact or statement. First of all,
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strongly agree with
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statement that
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televison
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television
sports
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programs are good for our society .
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inspire
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us to become
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and
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punctual
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teach
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us to do
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for
our
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better future.
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example
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most of the time
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see
interest
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the interest
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of children during childhood age, they set their dreams for
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the future
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and start working on
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them
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.
Important
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thing is that
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they
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focus on their goals. If they
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choose
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their goal as we want from
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televison
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television
, that should be good.
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,
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it's
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good
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a good
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source of
spend
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our free time. Nowadays, children enhance their
intrest
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interest
towards other
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activities like using mobile phones and
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playing
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indoor games ,
it
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may show bad behaviour
nd
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and
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consiqunces
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consequences
in future.
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,
television
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sports
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shows encourage them to go outside and try some outdoor
acitivities
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activities
like running,
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and jumping
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.
its
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help
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for the growth of
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children
and as well for adults.
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the other hand,
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televison
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television
sports
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shows should be limited.
television
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is
also
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using
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used
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for
another things
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like
telecast
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news about the whole world, for music ,
for
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and for
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entertainment. If for the whole day,
sports
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will be telecasting, it can be boring. People have
interest
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an interest
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to watch
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in watching
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sports
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but
i
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have their mood.
its
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should be telecasted but
in
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at
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a limit. In conclusion,
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Televison
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television
sports
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shows should be telecasted on
television
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as
a
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apply
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mentioned but
in
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with
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a limit, No one
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is going to
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watch
sports
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on
television
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hourly, they have other things
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to do.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pinnacle of athletic achievement
  • Inspire youths
  • Set personal fitness goals
  • Pique interest
  • Physical activities
  • Appealing
  • Dedication
  • Discipline
  • Motivational tool
  • Incorporate exercise
  • Relatable stories
  • Overcoming obstacles
  • Active lifestyle
  • Supportive environments
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