The graph below shows the average monthly salary and the prices of black and white and colour TV in Japanese yen from 1953 to 1973.

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average

income received in a month and the cost of coloured and monochrome television between 1953 to 1973 in Japan. In the big picture, it is conspicuous that the number of

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increased significantly in the observed periods.

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, the price of television plummeted in 20 years. Turning to money which individuals got in 1953, Japanese people got payment at just above 20,

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rose steadily by 45 yen in 10 years. After that,

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number skyrocketed and reached a peak at 180 yen in the

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period. Moving to the television cost,

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the price stayed at 100 in 1955 and declined fractionally until 1968,

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, the cost of black and white TV remained constant at around 40 until the end of the reported time.

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, there was a

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decrease

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colored TV from 1958 to 1963, before declining steadily by 20%.