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Some people believe that planning for the future is a waste of time because they think that focusing on the present is more important. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

These days, public debate has been going on over whether planning for the
future
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 or living in the present is more significant. Some argue that focusing on long-term goals
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 necessary because it leads to stability,
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 others believe that focusing on now makes lives more spontaneous. I tend to believe that sometimes
people
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 need to live in the present moment without planning but goals for the
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 are crucial for making thoughtful decisions. To start with, those who are constantly planning what they aspire to achieve, make step-by-step plans which show the path to success.
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, during studies, lecturers ask students to have a
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 plan for their career because they know that
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 students will stick to the roadmaps.
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 means that they could be more successful in their career
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 their structured approach. The second benefit of planning is financial stability.
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, most young
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 need to save money to buy a house,
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go on vacation or be safe financially when they will have to retire. In these
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 everyone has a dream or a
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 vision but they
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 need to think about a plan on how to reach those goals. One of the examples is to set aside some money every week or month to achieve the bigger planned aim. In conclusion, most
people
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 love to have flexibility and spontaneous experience without planning but more impact in our lives gives stability and balance. When
people
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 try to plan their
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 they can feel stable and calm which in the long term gives more mindfulness and emotional
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than no planning.

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Make sure to include clear main ideas in each paragraph. Each paragraph should focus on only one main point.
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Try to use linking words to connect ideas. This will help your essay flow better from one point to another.
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Provide more specific examples to support your ideas. This will make your argument stronger and clearer.
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Your introduction clearly states your opinion about the topic.
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You provide some good reasons for why planning for the future is important.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial stability
  • unexpected expenses
  • career advancement
  • long-term goals
  • structured approach
  • personal development
  • educational goals
  • fulfilling life
  • spontaneous experiences
  • emotional fulfillment
  • embrace opportunities
  • mental health
  • reduce stress and anxiety
  • mindfulness
  • balanced approach
  • flexibility and adaptation
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