The graph below shows the average monthly salary and the prices of black and white and colour TV in Japanese yen from 1953 to 1973.

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The line graph illustrates the average salary received monthly and the cost of both coloured and black and white

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japanese

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Japanese

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yen

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between 1953 and 1973.

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, the average income significantly increased over the years,

while

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the prices of both

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types declined during the time period.

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with,

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the Average

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monthly salary in

Japanese

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yen

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followed an upward trend over the 20-year period. In 1953,

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income by month was around 30

Japanese

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yen

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, followed by a gradual rise over the years to 100

Japanese

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yen

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in 1968. After that, the average salary skyrocketed to approximately 180

Japanese

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yen

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in 1973.

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, the prices of

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both started at high expenses

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then

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and then

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decline

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declined

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during

time

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the time

a time

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period. Black and white

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was sold at 100

Japanese

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in 1953, followed

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by a

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steady

delined

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declined

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to around 40

Japanese

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yen

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in 1968.

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then

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, the price remained relatively stable till 1973.

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, coloured

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comes

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came

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to market around five after black and white

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(in 1958), and was sold at 180

Japanese

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yen

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. In 1963,

this

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price plummeted to just above 100

Japanese

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yen

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, which

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continued

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fell

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fall

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gradually to about 80

Japanese

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yen

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in 1973.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words tv, japanese, yen with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

196 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Average monthly salary
Black and white TV
Colour TV
Japanese Yen
Affordability
Upward/downward trend
Technological advancements
Consumer preferences
Price dynamics
Market changes
Increase/decrease
Ratio
Introduction
Compare/contrast

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The graph below shows the average monthly salary and the prices of black and white and colour TV in Japanese yen from 1953 to 1973.

Many modern children spend great deal of time sitting in front of a television or computer screen. This is exteremly harmful to their development. Therefore, parents should strictly limit the time that children spend in this way. To what extent do you agree or disgree?

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Some people say economic growth is the only way to end world poverty and hunger, while others say economic growth is damaging the environment and must stop. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. (Society)

You have a full time job and are also doing a part time evening course. You know find that you cannot continue the course. Write a letter in your tutor. Write a letter -describe the situation -explain why you cannot continue at this time - say what action you would like to take

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