The graph below shows the average monthly salary and the prices of black and white and colour TV in Japanese yen from 1953 to 1973.

The graph below shows the average monthly salary and the prices of black and white and colour TV in Japanese yen from 1953 to 1973.
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The line graph illustrates the average salary received monthly and the cost of both coloured and black and white
TV
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in
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japanese
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yen
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between 1953 and 1973.
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, the average income significantly increased over the years,
while
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the prices of both
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types declined during the time period.
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with,
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monthly salary in
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yen
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followed an upward trend over the 20-year period. In 1953,
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the average
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income by month was around 30
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yen
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, followed by a gradual rise over the years to 100
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yen
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in 1968. After that, the average salary skyrocketed to approximately 180
Japanese
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yen
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in 1973.
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, the prices of
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both started at high expenses
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and then
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decline
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declined
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during
time
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the time
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period. Black and white
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was sold at 100
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in 1953, followed
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steady
delined
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declined
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to around 40
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yen
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in 1968.
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then
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, the price remained relatively stable till 1973.
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, coloured
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to market around five after black and white
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(in 1958), and was sold at 180
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yen
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. In 1963,
this
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price plummeted to just above 100
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yen
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, which
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continued
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to
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fall
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gradually to about 80
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yen
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in 1973.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words tv, japanese, yen with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Average monthly salary
  • Black and white TV
  • Colour TV
  • Japanese Yen
  • Affordability
  • Upward/downward trend
  • Technological advancements
  • Consumer preferences
  • Price dynamics
  • Market changes
  • Increase/decrease
  • Ratio
  • Introduction
  • Compare/contrast
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