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The chart below shows the results survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The chart below shows the results survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
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The bar chart below provides information about
final
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the final
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 rates of questioning
population
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the population
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 about their purchasing habits in
the
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a
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 few Australian towns in the past 4 weeks.The majority of the
bar
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bars
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 belong to going to
cafe
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cafes
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for drinking
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to drink
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 hot beverages.
Initially
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,The towns with more population like Sydney,Melbourne and Hobart visited cafes more than the others
while
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 the percentage rose between 60 to 65
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percent
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per cent
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 in the
last
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 4 weeks!
Secondly
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, Taking away the
coffees
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coffee
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 from the restaurants
are
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is
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 seen mostly in Hobart in the first place and the Brisbane in second which
are have
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 the highest rate and reached approximately 55
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percent
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per cent
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however
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 remained districts are below 50
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percent
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per cent
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.
Lastly
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,
Its
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It
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 seems buying
the
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apply
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raw coffee beans are
least
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less
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 popular in the areas than the mentioned factors,The amount of purchased
of
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apply
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beans couldn't reach more than 45
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percent
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per cent
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.On the top
are
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is
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 Sydney with almost 45
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percent
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per cent
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 and
the
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apply
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Melbourne
little
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a little
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 bit higher than 40
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percent
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per cent
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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