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The graph below gives information about the number of tourists who visited five different countries between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the number of tourists who visited five different countries between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the quantity of visitors who visited to
USA
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, France ,Malaysia ,
Brazil
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 and Egypt from 1995 to 2010.
Overall
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, it is clearly shown that
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USA
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the USA
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 was increased than other countries.
Moreover
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,
Brazil
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 and Egypt were the lowest
point
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 in the chart. Starting in 1995, France was
aproximately
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approximately
 30
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millions
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million
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 tourists arrive
the
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in the
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country
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 and
throught
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throughout
through
 the period it
was
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increased significantly to 60
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millions
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million
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 tourists in 2000. What is more,
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USA
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the USA
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was
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rose gradually to approximately 90
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millions
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million
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 visitors in 2005 but
than
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then
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 it remained stable over the period.
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, 10
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millions tourist
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million tourists
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 arrived
to
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in
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Brazil
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 and Egypt in 1995
andthey
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and they
were
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apply
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slightly
rise
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rose
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 to approximately 14
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millions tourist
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million tourists
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.
In addition
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, Malaysia
was
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started
to
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apply
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aproximately
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approximately
 22
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millions
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million
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 guests and
then
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 it
was
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increased
gradualy
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gradually
 to 40
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millions
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million
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 guests arrived
to
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in
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country
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the country
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. In
conculusion
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conclusion
, it is noticeable that over the period the highest
country
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 was
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USA
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the USA
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 and the lowest
country
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 was
Brazil
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.

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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words usa, brazil, millions, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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