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The chart below shows the number of girls per 100 boys enrolled in different levels of school education. Write a short report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The chart below shows the number of girls per 100 boys enrolled in different levels of school education. Write a short report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The chart illustrates how many
girls
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 for every 100 boys participate in several levels of school
education
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. The data was taken in 1990 and 1998.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 only in tertiary conditions in developed
countries
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, more
girls
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 enrolled above the target. In primary
education
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, the difference between
countries
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 that have grown and developed
countries
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 is not too much, with almost no differentiation in each period. The number of
girls
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 in developing
countries
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 increased slightly from 83 to 87,
whereas
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 in developed
countries
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, the increase was almost the same, 95 in 1990 and 96 in the next 8 years. In the next step,
education
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, there was middle diversity. In developing
countries
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, 72
girls
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 took part in 1990, which rose significantly in 1998 to 82.
Although
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 it was higher, the difference between 1990 and 1998 in developed
countries
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 is insignificant, with 98
girls
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 enrolled in 1990 and 99
girls
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 in 1998. The trend for tertiary
education
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 was different in each country's condition. In developing
countries
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, the participant of
girls
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 dropped a lot. In 1990, there were only 66
girls
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 involved and
this
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 increased moderately in the next 8 years period. Developed
countries
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 experienced an extreme rise. In all periods,
girls
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 who participated were above the target.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words girls, education, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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