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In recent times, many people are making the decision to leave alone.what are the causes of this? Does iit have positive or negative impact on society

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Nowadays, a large number of societies tend to choose to live on their own.
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 a tendency
mainly
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 caused by
significant
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a significant
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 increase
of
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 living
cost
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. I
believes
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this
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 phenomenon are resulting drawback and
good
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a good
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 effect on
community
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.
To begin
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 with, economic pressure is influencing
people
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 to live separately from others. It is happening
due to
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 a lack of ability to fulfil their basic needs
such
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 as
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, drinks, and services.
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, some
people
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are struggled
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 to feed an extra person during their lifetime as there are several costs
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 as healthcare, education, and entertainment.
In addition
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, Those economic considerations are basic needs which need to be purchased regularly.
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,
folks
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 who have limited incomes tend to choose
in
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a temporary place in order to save more money and prevent
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spend
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 of their relatives.
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, several economic considerations are preventing someone
to stay
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from staying
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 with other
people
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 gradually.
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,
such
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 a trend
have
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 resulted in several effects, both positively and negatively. On the one hand,
folks
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 who
occupy
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live
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 alone are most likely to focus on their own life. They will be able to improve some personal skills,
not to mention
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 the
siginificant
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significant
 amounts of capital that they can invest. So, in the future, they will be able to contribute
in
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 various aspects
to
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of
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the
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society.
On the other hand
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, those kinds of
people
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 are less sociable than other
human-being
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human beings
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 who stay with someone.
This
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 setback is happening because those
kind
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kinds
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 of
folks
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are
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 not meet with anyone on
day-to-day
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 basis,
not to mention
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 their ignorance of others' conditions.
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, their presence may be unrecognized by the community members.
To sum up
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, the decision to live separately from community members
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bringing
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 both useful and doubtful results
on
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social
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the social
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 realm. On the positive side,
people
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 will have some chances to develop their skills. On the negative side,
folks
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' existence might be unnoticed.

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grammatical accuracy
Make sure to use the correct form of verbs and pronouns to maintain grammatical accuracy (e.g., 'is' instead of 'are', 'believes' should be 'believe').
content expansion
Provide more relevant examples and specifics to strengthen the argument, especially in the main body paragraphs.
coherence
Consider smoother transitions between ideas and paragraphs to enhance the overall flow of the essay.
content understanding
You have identified key reasons for the trend of living alone and explored both positive and negative impacts.

Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Independence
  • Personal growth
  • Self-discovery
  • Financial independence
  • Social norms
  • Cultural shifts
  • Individualism
  • Urbanization
  • Technology
  • Loneliness
  • Community
  • Accommodations
  • Desirable
  • Relationships
  • Achievement
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