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The table below provides statistics on several major metro (MRT) systems around the world. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below provides statistics on several major metro (MRT) systems around the world. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant.
The table provides data on major metro (MRT) systems worldwide, including their
year
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 of completion, total length, and annual passenger
capacity
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.
Overall
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, the
year
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 of completion does not directly correlate with the total distance covered or the number of
passengers
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 transported annually. London has the oldest metro system, launched in 1863, and it covers the longest distance of 1100
km
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.
However
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, its annual carrying
capacity
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 is 548
million
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passengers
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, which is significantly lower than Tokyo’s. Tokyo’s MRT, completed in 1904, spans only 149
km
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, yet it has the highest passenger
capacity
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 of 1434
million
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 people per
year
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.
In contrast
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, Kyoto, completed in 1980, has the shortest system, stretching only 11
km
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 and carrying just 11
million
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passengers
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 annually—making it the smallest in both distance and
capacity
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. The most recently built metro, Los Angeles (completed in 2001), covers 14
km
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 and serves 90
million
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passengers
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 per
year
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, significantly surpassing Kyoto in both metrics. In summary,
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 older systems like London cover vast distances, newer ones
such
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 as Tokyo and Los Angeles can have higher passenger volumes despite their shorter lengths.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, capacity, passengers, km, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "provides" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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