Sports programmes are hugely popular on television nowadays. But some people argue that these programmes are to blame for the poor health of many young people who prefer to watch rather than part take in physical activity. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is sometimes argued that watching
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programs will result in
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sport
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activities and health issues.
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watching
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for a long period of time can be an issue, I strongly disagree with
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idea. Health organizations have been worried about young people watching their television for an excessive amount of time,
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the problems that come with it.
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, they argue that
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of the excitement which
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have, it can lead to many observing games and matches on their electronic devices.
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, the amount of citizens who watch football in Saudi Arabia
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approximately 5 million individuals
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people who play football extend to 1 million at most.
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, an issue healthcare workers face with
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fans
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is that they tend to eat and drink unhealthy snacks without realizing the amount of calories they are consuming.
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, doctors and nurses are troubled with the downsides that come with spending long hours in front of a TV, which is a habit that leads youth towards laziness and results in a sedentary lifestyle with no physical activity.
On the other hand
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, watching these
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programmes can motivate young kids to indulge in physical activities.
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, a wide sum of people look up to professional athletes, aspiring to be
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like them in a specific field of
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.
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to
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analysis, there have been many surveys showing the percentage of
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fans who have become more motivated to work out regularly is higher in comparison to those who
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motivated. One example is in South Korea,
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where 60
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% of citizens tend to live a longer life owing to the fact that it is popular to take daily mile walks
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to the gym.
To conclude
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this
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argument, I believe that in spite of
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programmes may contribute to a more sedentary lifestyle in some cases, it is more beneficial and educating for young folks to watch
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.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your position in the introduction to guide the reader on your viewpoint.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer paragraphing to separate distinct ideas. Introduce your points with topic sentences at the start of each paragraph.
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Provide more specific examples or statistics to strengthen your arguments, particularly in the second paragraph.
content
You provided a balanced view by presenting both sides of the argument.
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Your examples, particularly about viewers in Saudi Arabia and South Korea, were relevant to the topic.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary
  • obesity
  • physical activity
  • participation
  • engagement
  • motivation
  • inspiration
  • community
  • lifestyle
  • demotivate
  • promote
  • showcase
  • athletes
  • regimen
  • team spirit
  • excitement
  • comfort
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