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Describe a topic, idea or a concept you find so engaging that it makes you lose all track of time. Why does it captivate you? What or Who do you turn to when you want to learn more?

Piccasso’s paintings are a perfect example of how psychology influences one’s artwork. The infamous series in the “Blue Period”
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 sorrow, consequential to the loss of his
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 ones. Bold strokes of melancholic blue, cool tones and dark contours contradict
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 brisk and colourful illustrations.
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 the abstract style remains, the ambience of gloom,
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 isolation bloom. As for math in art, cubism is the best example. Geometrical shapes toy with diagrams,
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. All of
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 is seen in “Guitar on the
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” by Juan Gris, “The Kitchen” by Albert Gleizes and more. In poetry, stanzas steer the wheel of pronunciation, the way in which you recite a poem could change the meaning. Emily Dickinson’s “I Felt a Funeral in My Brain” if read swiftly could convey a sense of dread, but if read with proper pauses as indicated by marks, its existential crisis flows through the air as
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Consider clearly stating your main idea or thesis in the introduction to guide readers through your essay. A more defined structure can enhance coherence.
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Ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that links back to the central theme. This will improve flow and coherence between ideas.
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Expand on the examples provided to explain their relevance to the overall argument. This will help in demonstrating clear and comprehensive ideas.
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The essay touches on interesting and diverse art forms, showcasing a breadth of knowledge.
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The use of specific examples like Picasso's Blue Period and Emily Dickinson's poetry strengthens your arguments.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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