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The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make the comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make the comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the number of trips made by
youngster
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youngsters
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 aged between 5 and 12 years old,in one country from 1999 to 2010 for 5
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moda
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modes of
transportation
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 (car passenger, walking, cycling, walking and
bus
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, and
bus
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). As we can see from the chart,
total
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a total
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 number of walking is higher
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than moda
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moda tranportation
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the distance
 that
used
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 by teenagers in 1990. and cycling is the lower trips
thats
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that
that's
 happened in 2010. In the year
of
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1990, the number of trips that
used
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were used
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bye
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by
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youngster
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youngsters
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of
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for
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 walking
is
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was
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 the greatest over the year.
moreover
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,
the
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cycling, walking and
bus
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, and
bus
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was
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were
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 the stagnant
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moda
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modes of
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transportation
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. we can see that the minimum form of transformation was car passenger.
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on
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 the contrary, Car passenger is the upmost form of
transportation
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 that used by teenagers.
then
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following
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followed
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 by walking. and for the remaining
moda
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transportation
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, which
are
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is
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 cycling, walking and
bus
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,
and
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apply
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bus
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the bus
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was go
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was going
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 up
constanly
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constantly
 in the year
of
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apply
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2010.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words moda, transportation, bus with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trips
  • children
  • modes of transport
  • walk
  • cycle
  • public transport
  • drive
  • car
  • trends
  • decrease
  • increase
  • shift
  • convenient
  • comfortable
  • commuting
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • significant
  • indicate
  • reasons
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • 20-year period
  • doubled
  • considerable margin
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