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Writing Samples
Band 1.5

The plans below show a bookstore in 2000 and the bookstore now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The plans depict the changes in the layout of a bookstore from 2000 to the present.
Overall
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, the bookstore has been improved with the installation of a number of services and facilities, some
area
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coverted
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converted
covered
 for other purposes. Having looked at the pictures for more details, going ahead from the entrance, the service desk, which is on the right of the service desk, has
been
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remained stable.
In
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On
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 the opposite of the service desk,
new
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the new
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 books table and travel have
been remain
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remained
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 the same. Moving on to the other categories,
the
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cookery, hobbies and art were located in the centre in 2000, are moved to the right and combined with
the
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fiction, which is reduced in size. In the centre, three
table
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tables
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 and twelve
chair
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 are added to serve visitors. The non-fiction
also
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 has been moved to the end of the store and
are
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is
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 replaced by a cafe counter.

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Task Achievement
Consider providing a clearer comparison between the two layouts, highlighting the key changes more distinctly.
Coherence and Cohesion
Improve the logical flow of the essay by better linking the sections together, perhaps using more cohesive devices.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure to check for grammatical inaccuracies and awkward phrasing, which can detract from clarity.
Task Achievement
The essay identifies key changes in the bookstore layout, which is central to the task.
Task Achievement
There is an attempt to cover various areas of the bookstore in the discussion, touching on both the past and present layouts.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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