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Band 4.5

An increasing number of people of all ages are getting information from electronic products, and some people tend to argue printed books as well as magazines are no longer needed. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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in the modern world, a
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 figure of
people
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 of all ages
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 earning details from electronic devices. at the same time, some
people
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 tend to argue
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that printed
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 books
as well as
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 magazines are no longer required.
this
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 essay completely agrees with the statement and
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 different reasons and opinions.
to begin
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 with, an increasing number of consumers who gain their information from modern sources
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 as
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TV and
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smartphones
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 indicates to success
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 current
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development
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 in the world. because many nations can get vital news or global statistics in front of their screens.
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 a result, founders will launch new platforms to convey the news and
boadcasts
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broadcasts
 to cover the interest of
people
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.
for example
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, the BBC channel is the largest platform that
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 400 headlines every day to several regions. with 3000000 followers
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 their YouTube channel.
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,
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paper books and magazines are old methods to earn
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world events. numerous experts predict these ways will
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disappear
 in the near future because alternative sources are available
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on
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the
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digital websites. Thereby, many
people
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 think it is logical
to
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that
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 these papers are no longer needed in the next 10 years.
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, a Japanese research centre called the HHG
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 showed
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statistics in
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late
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2022. they recorded
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diminish
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diminished
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of
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percentage
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the percentage
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 of printed
books
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book
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 users between 2012-2022. the result was they decreased by 70%.
to sum up
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, both methods
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in
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everywhere.
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, it is
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a return
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 to the personal preference of different societies.
it is clear that
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the
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digital ways
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 the most common and I
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Agree
 with
this
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 statement.

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task achievement
Ensure that your ideas are well developed and explained. Some points need more elaboration to clearly convey your message.
coherence and cohesion
Try to improve the flow of your ideas by using linking words and phrases. This can help connect your arguments more smoothly.
coherence and cohesion
Check for grammatical errors and sentence structure issues. Improving these elements will enhance overall clarity.
task achievement
You have addressed the task and expressed a clear opinion regarding the relevance of printed materials.
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You provided specific examples, such as the BBC channel and the Japanese research, which add credibility to your arguments.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Accessibility
  • Environmentally friendly
  • Cost-effective
  • Tactile experience
  • Screen fatigue
  • Credibility
  • Rigorous editing
  • Fact-checking
  • Overhead costs
  • Physical storage space
  • Updated instantaneously
  • Remote areas
  • Prolonged screen time
  • Digital consumption
  • Paper waste
  • Tactile experience
  • Eye strain
  • Reliability
  • Misleading
  • Digital devices
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