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Some people say that it is fair for each group member to be given the same grade after a group project. Others think that different grades should be allocated based on the level of contribution. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Currently, the way for personnel scoring in a
group
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 project
have
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 risen as a debate.
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 some people argue that an equal score should be given to all
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people
 in the
group
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, others think that the grades should be considered best on the level of each member's
contribution
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. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss each perspective and give my opinion. On the one hand,
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 equal score should be given since a
group
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 project is designed to foster collaboration and avoid
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individual
 competitiveness.
This
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 means that the achievement is demonstrated by the
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 result, not
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individu
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individual
 himself.
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,
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 the level of
contribution
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 is difficult since each
members
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 have their own strength in supporting the goal of the projects.
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, all the
members
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 should be treated and appreciated
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the
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 similar level
according to
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 the
group
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's result.
On the other hand
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, the different grades
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 often considered as much fair approach
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 appreciating
the
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apply
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individual performance.
This
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 idea has emerged since some
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personnel
persons
 often do not give much
contribution
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 and even become
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rider
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.
Further
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,
this
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 situation brings another issue as the other
members
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, who have been dedicated,
also
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 will feel demotivated if being equivalently appreciated with the free rider.
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, the assessment based on each
contribution
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 will be beneficial in treating the
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 dynamic
as well as
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boost
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 all the
members
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 to give their best effort.
To sum up
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,
although
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 the similar grading system is motivated by the idea that the
group
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 project
is resulted
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results
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 from all
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members
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member's
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 collaboration,
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however
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 I strongly believe that
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distinguishing
 the score based on each
persons'
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person's
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 work is more accountable
as well as
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 beneficial in ensuring the delivery of best efforts from all the
members
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.

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task achievement
Ensure to include more specific examples to support your points. This will strengthen your arguments and provide a clearer understanding for the reader.
coherence and cohesion
Pay attention to language accuracy, especially with plural forms and singular forms, as well as spelling errors (e.g. 'personil' should be 'personnel').
coherence and cohesion
Try to improve the logical flow by linking your ideas more explicitly. Use cohesive devices to show how your points connect.
task achievement
Good attempt to address both perspectives on the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Clear introduction and conclusion that outline the topic and your opinion.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • collaboration
  • contribution
  • motivation
  • accountability
  • group dynamic
  • dedicated
  • penalty
  • credit
  • underperforming
  • quality of work
  • tension
  • harmony
  • unity
  • individual efforts
  • project outcomes
  • base grade
  • recognition
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