You are going on a short training course at a college in New Zealand. You need somewhere to live while you are there. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter, explain your situation describe the accommodation you require

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Dear Sir, My name is Areeruk Bunted . I applied for the short-term English course at an A college in New Zealand. I am writing to enquire about the dormitory near the college. I am doing a short course at A college. I require a room for 2 weeks. I need basic facilities in the room or shared house. It should be a single bedroom room with an ensuite bathroom and it has its own or shared kitchen .

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it's far from campus , it should have a bus station. Sometimes I miss my home,and

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symptoms. I would really appreciate it if you could help me find a suitable place which is near to the university. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Mangesh

areeruk.buntedSat Mar 15 2025

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Task Achievement

Try to clarify the types of facilities you need in more detail. For example, specify what basic facilities mean to you.

Coherence and Cohesion

Consider organizing your paragraphs better by grouping similar ideas together. For example, you can separate your accommodation requirements from your personal needs.

Overall Impression

You have used a polite tone throughout the letter, which is essential in such correspondence.

Task Achievement

You provided specific details about your accommodation needs, which is helpful for the accommodation officer.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

150 words

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You are going on a short training course at a college in New Zealand. You need somewhere to live while you are there. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter, explain your situation describe the accommodation you require

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Some people argue that we should do research into their family history. Others, agree with the view that we should focus on the present and future generations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Describe one or two leadership, community and/or learning & development activities that you have engaged in.

Some claim that children are more aware of environmental issues than older adults. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

With traffic jams and pollution increasing every year in big cities, some people say that public transport should be free in big cities to help reduce these problems which are caused by cars.To what extent do you agree or disagree?