You are going on a short training course at a college in New Zealand. You need somewhere to live while you are there. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter, explain your situation describe the accommodation you require

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Dear Sir, My name is Areeruk Bunted . I applied for the short-term English course at an A college in New Zealand. I am writing to enquire about the dormitory near the college. I am doing a short course at A college. I require a room for 2 weeks. I need basic facilities in the room or shared house. It should be a single bedroom room with an ensuite bathroom and it has its own or shared kitchen .
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, I would like to have a wi-fi connection . Another option
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it's far from campus , it should have a bus station. Sometimes I miss my home,and
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symptoms. I would really appreciate it if you could help me find a suitable place which is near to the university. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Mangesh

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Task Achievement
Try to clarify the types of facilities you need in more detail. For example, specify what basic facilities mean to you.
Coherence and Cohesion
Consider organizing your paragraphs better by grouping similar ideas together. For example, you can separate your accommodation requirements from your personal needs.
Overall Impression
You have used a polite tone throughout the letter, which is essential in such correspondence.
Task Achievement
You provided specific details about your accommodation needs, which is helpful for the accommodation officer.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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