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Some people think that a person can never understand the culture of a country unless they speak the language. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Could it be true that a person can never understand the
culture
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 of a country unless they speak the
language
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? I would like to say
that
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that I totally disagree with
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 statement.
Firstly
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, learning new languages could be difficult,
however
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 learning a new
culture
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 is very natural and seamless. There are different write-ups about different countries online, which people can read and learn from. Staying in an environment where one did not grow up
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, could be a bit difficult sometimes if you do not understand the
language
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, but understanding the
culture
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 would help
such
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person
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a person
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. Understanding a
culture
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 like greeting, which everyone widely accepts as a way of relating to people. Trying to make cultural gestures on how to greet people in that environment, would draw the indigenes to you and help out even
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in
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asituation
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situations
 of
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language
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the language
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 barrier.
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, in a new country where anyone finds himself or herself, it is important to learn
their
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about their
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culture
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,
on
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how they greet, eat and
normal
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their normal
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 way of life. The internet has made it so easy for
everyne
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everyone
 to live in a new environment with the help of Google
translate
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. With the help of Google
translate
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 on your mobile devices, you can communicate in another
language
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 without learning the
languae
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language
initially
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. In conclusion, I would like to say that you can understand a
culture
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 without learning the
lanuage
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language
, since it is now a
digitial
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digital
 world and understanding of a
culture
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 comes naturally. It is part of
human
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humans
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 to learn new cultures.

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Make sure to develop your main ideas further with additional examples or explanations. This can enhance the clarity of your argument and provide more depth to your essay.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that your points are clearly organized and logically connected. Using linking phrases can help your reader follow your argument more coherently.
language use
Pay attention to grammatical errors and inaccuracies, as they can sometimes distract from your message. Proofreading your essay can help catch these mistakes.
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You have introduced a clear stance, expressing your disagreement with the statement. This sets a strong foundation for your argument.
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Your use of examples, like Google Translate, shows an understanding of how technology can assist in cultural understanding without language proficiency.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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