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Some people think that a person can never understand the culture of a country unless they speak the language. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree? Very sharp statement, I would say.
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 what I am
expiriencing
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experiencing
 these days/months/years, I would say that with the development of technologies, abilities to interact with a customer and different ways to deliver products from every part of the world, online shopping will be
in
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of
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 an absolute higher priority. During
pandemic
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the pandemic
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lockdown
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lockdown,
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 online
purchuses
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purchases
 were nearly the only way to get new stuff. And since
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then
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 it
is
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has
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 only
growing
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grown
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. Now let's look
on
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at
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 the giants of the
marked
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market
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 whose impact is undisputed. Amazon, eBay, AliExpress, and others. The total
amount
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number
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 of people who use their service is
enourmous
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enormous
. And it is growing daily. You can now start your own online
shop
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 in 2 clicks by using special services. "Shopify" will allow you to create your own online
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shop's
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shop
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 website from scratch in just 2 clicks. You can live in Mexico and sell
freezed
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frozen
 tacos to
ukrainians
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Ukrainians
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. There are no limits based on location. Not anymore. Even small businesses can work worldwide. Of
course
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 it will have negative consequences for local shops. I won't say that it
wil ldestroy
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will destroy
 the
completely
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company completely
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but
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, but
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 no
doubts
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 it will hurt. For a great
amount
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number
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 of
people
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people,
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 local shops
is
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are
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 some kind of a tradition or
rituals
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ritual
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. People go to the same
shop
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 on
regular
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a regular
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 basis because they just used to
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shop
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shopping
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 there. And it is
also
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 about
time saving
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time-saving
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. No need to wait for
order
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the order
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 for
few
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a few
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 days, instant delivery is better in some specific cases. Times change, so in order to be on
top
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top,
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 you have to adapt.

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task response
Plan with a clear view. Start with your main idea, then give two simple reasons, and end with a short finish that restates your view.
coherence
Use easy linking words and short sentences to help flow.
coherence
Stick to one idea at a time and add a short example for each idea.
examples
Use real, small examples to show your point, not long talk.
language
Check basic grammar and spell common words correctly.
strength
The essay gives a clear view that online shopping grows.
strength
It uses real events like the pandemic to back the view.
strength
It mentions well known sites to show a point.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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