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It’s believed that people who read for pleasure develop their imagination more and acquire better language skills compared to people who prefer watching television. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Reading is the most underrated and popular form of entertainment for people in the past and
television
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 is widely considered
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the most used electronic device for leisure activities in modern
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. It is argued that
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literatures
literature
 provide people with more benefits than watching
television
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, in terms of imagination and
language
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skills
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 acquisition. I totally agree
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 the statement and
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 essay will outline the reasons behind my agreement.
Firstly
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, reading for pleasure encourages creativity by allowing readers to immerse themselves in diverse worlds, scenarios, and characters, which stimulate the imagination.
Secondly
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, books often contain richer
language
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 and vocabulary than
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 scripts, leading to enhanced
language
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skills
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 and a greater
undrstanding
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understanding
 of
language
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 nuances.
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, reading requires active engagement and critical thinking, which contrasts with the passive consumption of
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 content, fostering deeper cognitive development. 
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, engaging in literature can improve empathy as readers experience life
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 the perspectives of various
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, honing their understanding of human emotions and relationships.
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, people who read regularly often have better writing
skills
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 as they subconsciously learn different styles,
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, and techniques from the authors they read. In conclusion,
it is clear that
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 reading for pleasure enhances imagination,
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 ability, empathy, and writing
skills
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.

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Your essay presents clear arguments for why reading enhances imagination and language skills, demonstrating a strong understanding of the topic.
coherence and cohesion
You displayed a good range of vocabulary and varied sentence structures throughout your essay, contributing to a fluent writing style.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • imagination
  • develop
  • language skills
  • acquire
  • pleasure
  • creativity
  • engagement
  • critical thinking
  • cognitive development
  • empathy
  • emotional intelligence
  • perspectives
  • subconsciously
  • styles
  • grammar
  • nuances
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