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The charts below give information on the ages of the populatiosn of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populatiosn of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate the distribution of the
population
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 by
age
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group
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 (0-14
years
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, 15-59
years
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, and 60+
years
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) in Italy and Yemen in 2000,
along with
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 predictions for 2050.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the teenage and adult groups (15-59
years
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) dominate the charts in both countries throughout the period.
While
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 the
proportion
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 of young and adult populations in Yemen is expected to continue growing, the percentage of Italians in the same
age
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group
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 is predicted to decline in the future. In 2000, the majority of Italy's
population
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 was in the 15-59
age
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group
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, accounting for nearly 61.6%.
This
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 was followed by the 0-14
age
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group
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 at 24%, and
finally
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, the 60+
age
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group
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 at approximately 14.3%.
However
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, by 2050, the
proportion
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 of the 15-59
age
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group
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 is expected to decline to 46.2%.
In contrast
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, the percentage of senior citizens (60+) is predicted to increase significantly, rising from 24% in 2000 to 42.3% in 2050. Meanwhile, the
proportion
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 of the 0-14
age
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group
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 is expected to decrease slightly, from 14.3% in 2000 to 11.5% in 2050. In Yemen, the
population
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 distribution in 2000 was significantly different. Nearly half of the
population
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 (50.1%) was in the 0-14
age
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group
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, followed by the 15-59
age
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group
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 at 46.3%, and the 60+
age
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group
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 at just 3.6%. By 2050, the
proportion
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 of the 0-14
age
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group
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 is predicted to decrease to 37%,
while
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 the 15-59
age
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group
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 is expected to rise to 57.3%. The
proportion
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 of the 60+
age
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group
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 is projected to remain relatively low, increasing only slightly to 5.7%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, age, group, years, proportion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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