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The bar chart shows the distribution of YouTube users worldwide as of January 2023 by age group. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. To zoom in, click on the image.

The bar chart shows the distribution of YouTube users worldwide as of January 2023 by age group. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. To zoom in, click on the image.
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The chart displays the usage of
YouTube
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, a social media platform, in January 2023, segmented by
age
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 cohort.
Overall
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, usage of
YouTube
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 users fluctuated throughout the period of 2023.Specifically,
people
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have
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are
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 around the 25- 34
age
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 group use
YouTube
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 more than other
age
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 groups.
This
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 indicates that
YouTube
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 has successfully captured the
attention
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 of young adults.
According to
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 the chart, it illustrates that
people
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 around 18- 24
age
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 and 45- 54
age
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 have the same percentage of using
YouTube
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 in the world. Following that,
people
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 approximately 45- 54 years of
age
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 can
also
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 turn their
attention
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 to
YouTube
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, with a percentage of 12. Regarding persons aged 65 and older,
YouTube
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 usage is slightly over 8
percent
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per cent
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.
Finally
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, users who are 55–64 years old use
YouTube
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with
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apply
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8
percent
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per cent
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, and it makes sense that the 55–64
age
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 group has less
attention
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for
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to
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 using
YouTube
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. To wrap up,
while
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 young
people
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 opt to for using use
YouTube
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, it's understandable that older
people
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have
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pay
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 less
attention
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for
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to
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 using
YouTube
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words youtube, age, people, attention with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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